道歉信 Dear Ms Wong: Thank you for your letter of March 21 about I slept in the English lesson. I am aware of the consequences of this. But i honestly would like to let you know the cause of this. I am very sory to sleep in the classroom affected classmate and teachers. I am vey fond of watching TV. So, last Sunday, I watched TV did not go to bed until 3 oclock in the morning. I feel asleep in English class therefore sleep insufficiency. I konw that it it an offence and i apologize to you also to help me come out of this. please give me one chance and i acsure you that i will never do such a thing in life again. please allow me this time and will prove that i can clear the sleep do not happen in the claassroom. Please forgive me. please accept my profound apologies for this matter. Yours Sincerely Annie Chan
the
matter
that
I
slept
in
the
English
lesson
.第二段开头一句话，你一句句子怎么可以有两个谓语动词，至少给它一个连词吧，或者可以用分词做伴随状语:把affected改成
,affecting（注意要加这个逗号）；
I
watched
TV
did
not
go
to
bed
until
3
oclock
in
the
morning
这句也是同样的问题，在did
前加个连词and
;
I
feel
asleep
in
English
class
therefore
sleep
insufficiency.
这句也是一样的问题，therefore
是副词，把它换成连词because，而且你sleep动词怎么可以用insufficiency这个名词修饰呢，所以从therefore开始全改掉，可以改成because
l
sleep
insufficiently.然后acsure，应该是assure吧，please
allow
me
this
time
and
will
prove
that
i
can
clear
the
sleep
do
not
happen
in
the
classroom.
这句中...and
will
prove...，改成and
I
will...；我不知道你clear
the
sleep
是什么意思，是扫除倦意还是？反正prove
that
i
can
clear
the
sleep
do
not
happen
in
the
claassroom.
这句宾语从句结构乱七八糟的，你直接简单点不行吗，可以是prove
that
i
won't
sleep
again
in
the
classroom.
反正语法错的地方你可以自己改，我打的句子你可以参考一下。
