以下是题目、我写的作文以及评分标准。
拜托告诉我我哪里有错，扣多少分以及你评的分。
书面表达（满分十分）
A.Time to________
B.________is(are) beautiful
要求：
1.请从A、B两个题目中任选一个，把题目补充完整后作答，分值相同。
2.注意紧扣主题，意思连贯，语言通顺，书写规范。
3.不得使用真实姓名和校名，如需使用姓名，请用Mike,Gina等英文名字，校名统一使用Guangming Middle School。
3.词数不少于60。
Hainan is beautiful
I like some places.And my favorite place is Hainan.
Hainan have many beaches.And the weather is hot.But you can play beach volleyball on the beach.It can makes you happy and relaxing.Hainan also have many trees.I think it is beautiful.Do you think so?
Hainan is beautiful.Ireally love Hainan.I will go there one day!
书面表达评分标准：
一档（7—10分）内容切题、层次清楚、语言流畅，基本无语法错误。
二档（4—6分）内容切题、层次不够分明、语言基本流畅，语法错误较少，内容表达基本完整。
三档（1—3分）有一定的内容，能写出个别与内容相关的句子，但语言表达错误很多。
注：1.全文大小写、标点符号有错误做多扣1分。
2.拼写错误每五个词扣0.5分，全文做多扣1分，同一个单词的拼写错误不重复扣分。略有语法错误，但不影响文中内容的扣0.5分。全文的语法错误最多扣1分。
3.词数少于60扣1分。
2 时态和句式单一，没有体现课程标准五级要求应掌握的语言技能。建议在能力允许的基础上，尝试并列句和复合句。斟酌词汇和短语，既不落俗套，又安全可靠。
3 存在语法错误 (形容词词形错误realxing--relaxed 动词词形错误have--has can makes--can make)
满分作文必须语言无谬误、要点无遗漏、有真情实感，行文地道！
综上所述，建议得分第一档低分段7分左右。
我为你修改了一遍，如有疑问可与我短信联系。
Hainan is beautiful
I have been to many places in our country. However, Hainan is my favorite.
The weather in Hainan is very hot. Therefore, you can see green trees and pretty flowers all the year round. As the second largest island in China, it has long white beaches which are excellent for beach volleyball as well as water sports. It can make you happy and relaxed if you have a nice holiday on the beach there.
I really love Hainan, a beautiful place to spend the vacation. How I hope to visit it again one day!
（Paper-correcting for Senior high school entrance examination 2003-2009）
其余的基本上差不多了
算我
1分钟看结束 圈了圈 扣你3分语法连词汇 基本上还可以
如果你们那儿改的严 估计二档吧 差不到哪儿去的本回答被提问者采纳
但是最重要的是，你的语句不连贯，表意不清。
东写西写，
最多5-6分
