写的是友谊的能挑多少错就要多少错然后给个对的高一水平啊
Every one has friends ，but do you know who is your real friend?
In my opinion,a real friend should be a listener then you can tell everything to and never be laughed by him. What 's more,he can help you to choose the right way but not the way looks good. Last but not least,maybe sometimes he can't help himself when he is in trouble,but if i am in trouble,he will try his best to help me.
Tony,who is my best friend,is one of real friends in my life. Although sometimes he make me angry,he always make me laugh. The most important is that he can forgive and forget all the mistakes i make. It really moved me deeply and i believe everybody will believe Tony is a real friend.
I think everyone should have a real friend and should have true friendship. It can help you to study hard and study easy,when you are upset,it also can cheer you up,can't it?
Every one has friends ，but do you know who is your real friend?
第一句，正确。
In my opinion,a real friend should be a listener then you can tell everything to and never be laughed by him.
第二句,改成：
In my opinion, a real friend should be a listener whom you can tell everything to and never be laughed by.
或者改成：
In my opinion, a real friend should be a listener then you can tell everything to him and never be laughed by.
What 's more,he can help you to choose the right way but not the way
looks good.
改成：What 's more,he can help you to choose the right way but not the way that looks good.
Last but not least,maybe sometimes he can't help himself when he is in trouble,but if i am in trouble,he will try his best to help me.
这句话我看着并没有错误，不过要看你们老师怎么理解了，当然要把i,改成I.
Tony,who is my best friend,is one of real friends in my life.
这句话，意思烦冗，应该改成：Tony is one of the real friends in my life.
Although sometimes he make me angry,he always make me laugh.
这句应该该成：Although sometimes he made me angry, in most of the time he made me laugh.
The most important is that he can forgive and forget all the mistakes i make.
这句应该改成：The most important is that he can forgive and forget all the mistakes I made.
It really moved me deeply and i believe everybody will believe Tony is a real friend.
这句话应改成：It really moved me deeply and I think everybody will believe as I do that Tony is a real friend.
I think everyone should have a real friend and should have true friendship.
这句话用should，语气很奇怪，如果要用，应该改成：
To have true friendship, I think everyone should find himself a real friend.
It can help you to study hard and study easy,when you are upset,it also can cheer you up,can't it?
改成：
True friendship can help you to study hard and study easy,when you are upset,it also can cheer you up,can't it?
第一句，正确。
In my opinion,a real friend should be a listener then you can tell everything to and never be laughed by him.
第二句,改成：
In my opinion, a real friend should be a listener whom you can tell everything to and never be laughed by.
或者改成：
In my opinion, a real friend should be a listener then you can tell everything to him and never be laughed by.
What 's more,he can help you to choose the right way but not the way
looks good.
改成：What 's more,he can help you to choose the right way but not the way that looks good.
Last but not least,maybe sometimes he can't help himself when he is in trouble,but if i am in trouble,he will try his best to help me.
这句话我看着并没有错误，不过要看你们老师怎么理解了，当然要把i,改成I.
Tony,who is my best friend,is one of real friends in my life.
这句话，意思烦冗，应该改成：Tony is one of the real friends in my life.
Although sometimes he make me angry,he always make me laugh.
这句应该该成：Although sometimes he made me angry, in most of the time he made me laugh.
The most important is that he can forgive and forget all the mistakes i make.
这句应该改成：The most important is that he can forgive and forget all the mistakes I made.
It really moved me deeply and i believe everybody will believe Tony is a real friend.
这句话应改成：It really moved me deeply and I think everybody will believe as I do that Tony is a real friend.
I think everyone should have a real friend and should have true friendship.
这句话用should，语气很奇怪，如果要用，应该改成：
To have true friendship, I think everyone should find himself a real friend.
It can help you to study hard and study easy,when you are upset,it also can cheer you up,can't it?
改成：
True friendship can help you to study hard and study easy,when you are upset,it also can cheer you up,can't it?
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第1个回答 2010-09-10
Everyone has friends ，but do you know who is your real friend?
In my opinion,a real friend should be a listener then you can tell everything to him and never be laughed by him. What 's more,he can help you to choose the right way but not the way that looks good. Last but not least,maybe sometimes he can't help himself when he is in trouble,but if I am in trouble,he will try his best to help me.
Tony,who is my best friend,is one of my real friends in my life. Although sometimes he makes me angry,he always makes me laugh. The most important is that he can forgive and forget all the mistakes I made. It really moves me deeply and I believe everybody will believe
that Tony is a real friend.
I think everyone should have a real friend and should have true friendships. It can help you to study hard and study easy,when you are upset,it also can cheer you up,can't it?
In my opinion,a real friend should be a listener then you can tell everything to him and never be laughed by him. What 's more,he can help you to choose the right way but not the way that looks good. Last but not least,maybe sometimes he can't help himself when he is in trouble,but if I am in trouble,he will try his best to help me.
Tony,who is my best friend,is one of my real friends in my life. Although sometimes he makes me angry,he always makes me laugh. The most important is that he can forgive and forget all the mistakes I made. It really moves me deeply and I believe everybody will believe
that Tony is a real friend.
I think everyone should have a real friend and should have true friendships. It can help you to study hard and study easy,when you are upset,it also can cheer you up,can't it?
第2个回答 2010-09-10
Everyone has friends ，but do you know who is your real friend?
In my opinion,a real friend should be a listener then you can tell everything to him (这里缺了个宾语）and never laugh at (这里不能用被动语态） him. What 's more,he can help you to choose the right way though it(这里but不太妥，the way重复改为it) doesn't look good. Last but not least,maybe sometimes he can't help himself when he is in trouble.（，改为.）But if I (I要大写） am in trouble,he will try his best to help me.
Tony（,who要去掉） is my best friend,（is要去掉）one of real friends in my life.(这里意思不烦冗啊，算是强调Tony真的是我好朋友吧）Although sometimes he makes(第三人称单数要用makes) me angry,he always makes(改为makes) me laughy(这里不能用动词，改为形容词）. The most important thing(缺宾语）is that he can forgive and forget all the mistakes I(I要大写） make. It really moved me deeply and I (I要大写）believe that(还是加个that吧）everybody will believe Tony is a real friend.
I think everyone should have a real friend and （should去掉） have true friendship. It can help you to study hard and study easy.(，改为.)When you are upset,it also can cheer you up,can't it?
In my opinion,a real friend should be a listener then you can tell everything to him (这里缺了个宾语）and never laugh at (这里不能用被动语态） him. What 's more,he can help you to choose the right way though it(这里but不太妥，the way重复改为it) doesn't look good. Last but not least,maybe sometimes he can't help himself when he is in trouble.（，改为.）But if I (I要大写） am in trouble,he will try his best to help me.
Tony（,who要去掉） is my best friend,（is要去掉）one of real friends in my life.(这里意思不烦冗啊，算是强调Tony真的是我好朋友吧）Although sometimes he makes(第三人称单数要用makes) me angry,he always makes(改为makes) me laughy(这里不能用动词，改为形容词）. The most important thing(缺宾语）is that he can forgive and forget all the mistakes I(I要大写） make. It really moved me deeply and I (I要大写）believe that(还是加个that吧）everybody will believe Tony is a real friend.
I think everyone should have a real friend and （should去掉） have true friendship. It can help you to study hard and study easy.(，改为.)When you are upset,it also can cheer you up,can't it?
