The English Corner in Zhongshan Park is a place in where people go to practise their spoken English there.Every Sunday afternoon they gather around,talk with each other in English.Among them have students,teachers,doctors and so on.I first went to the English Corner when I was Junior Grade Two.i went to there every Sunday but talked with some people in English.In the past three years I had never been absent.I′m sure I’ve made great progress in my listening and speaking.Also we have made many friends there.It is really a good place.I hope many friends will join us.
The English Corner in Zhongshan Park is a place【删in】 where people go to practise their spoken English 【删there】.Every Sunday afternoon they gather around,【talk 改成 talking】 with each other in English.Among them 【have 改成 there are】 students,teachers,doctors and so on.I first 【加 time】went to the English Corner when I was 【加in】Junior Grade Two.【i 改 I】 went 【删to】 there every Sunday 【but改and】 talked with some people in English.In the past three years I 【had 改 have】 never been absent.I′m sure I’ve made great progress in my listening and speaking.Also we have made many friends there.It is really a good place.I hope 【many 改成 more】 friends will join us.
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一共十一处错误，其中i【改I】应为楼主自己打错了。
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第1个回答 2010-10-02
The English Corner in Zhongshan Park is a place in which(where) people go to practise their spoken English .
Every Sunday afternoon they gather around and talk(或把talk改成talking,用现在分词短语表“伴随”状况，不过，talking前面要用逗号隔开） with each other in English.Among them there are students,teachers,doctors and so on.I first went to the English Corner when I was a student in Junior Grade Two.I went there and talked with some people in English every Sunday .In the past three years I have never been absent.I′m sure I’ve made great progress in my listening and speaking.What't more(而且）， I have made many friends there.It is really a good place.I hope many friends will join us.
祝你进步！
Every Sunday afternoon they gather around and talk(或把talk改成talking,用现在分词短语表“伴随”状况，不过，talking前面要用逗号隔开） with each other in English.Among them there are students,teachers,doctors and so on.I first went to the English Corner when I was a student in Junior Grade Two.I went there and talked with some people in English every Sunday .In the past three years I have never been absent.I′m sure I’ve made great progress in my listening and speaking.What't more(而且）， I have made many friends there.It is really a good place.I hope many friends will join us.
祝你进步！
第2个回答 2010-10-02
The English Corner in Zhongshan Park is a place （in 去掉） where people go to practise their spoken English （there 去掉，画蛇添足，前面已有where了）.Every Sunday afternoon they gather （around 改together比较好）,（talk 改talking 较好） with each other in English.Among them （have 改are) students,teachers,doctors and so on.I first went to the English Corner when I was (Junior Grade Two 改in Grade Two,Junior).(i 改大写I)went （to 去掉，不用to )there every Sunday （but 改为and较合适）talked with some people in English.In the past three years I （had 改为have，在过去的三年，一般现在时） never been absent.I′m sure I’ve made great progress in my listening and speaking.(Also 可改用As well更恰当） we have made many friends there.It is really a good place.I hope many friends will join us.
第3个回答 2010-10-02
The English Corner in Zhongshan Park is a place where people go to practise their spoken English .Every Sunday afternoon they gather around,talk with each other in English.Among them have students,teachers,doctors and so on.I first went to the English Corner when I was Junior Grade Two.i went to there every Sunday but talked with some people in English.In the past three years I had never been absent.I′m sure I’ve made great progress in my listening and speaking.Also we have made many friends there.It is really a good place.I hope many friends will join us.
第4个回答 2010-10-02
The English Corner in Zhongshan Park is a place （去掉in）where people go to practise their spoken English （去掉there）.Every Sunday afternoon they gather around,（talk该为talking） with each other in English.Among them （have改为there are） students,teachers,doctors and so on.I first went to the English Corner when I was （加入in）Junior Grade Two.(i 大写）went to there every Sunday （but改为and） talked with some people in English.In the past three years I （had改为have） never been absent.I′m sure I’ve made great progress in my listening and speaking.（Also 放在句首，要加逗号）we have made many friends there.It is really a good place.I hope （many改为more） friends will join us.
