The postcards always spoil the writer’s holiday. Last summer, the writer went to the Italy to spend holiday. All the holiday, the writer thought about that send postcard to his friends, but he did not send a single card to anyone until last day of his holiday. The writer made a big decision that he bought thirty-seven cards and whole day stied in room.. But he did not write a single cards.
The writer just received a letter from his brother who is an engineer. He has been abroad Australia six mouths and he has been visited many place of Australia. Now he stay Darwin . my brother has never been abroad before, so he is very enjoying this trip.
Mr. scott has opened his first garage in Silbury and lately he has opened another in Pinhust how is five miles from silbury. Mr. Scoot ofen send many urgent message and requests spare part from one garage to the other. But he can not get a telephone for his second garage. So he bought twelve pigeons which carried these message and spare part from one garage to another. Yesterday, this bird covered one message from Silbury to Pinhurt and he covered the distance in three minutes.
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2 根据句意，All the holiday应该为during the holiday，或者throughout the holiday；the writer thought about that send postcard to his friends这句话中将about去掉，因为think可以直接加宾语，that 后面是一个宾语从句，应该要有一套独立的句子成分（主谓宾），所以send之前应该加一个主语he 后面再接一个情态动词should
3 until last day of his holiday有误，在序数词（比如first，second，last）的前面一般要加定冠词，表示特指，改为until the last day of his holiday
4.The writer made a big decision that he bought thirty-seven cards and whole day stied in room有误，应该在whole前面加the，根据句意stied应该改为stayed
4 But he did not write a single cards.有误，既然前面用了a，后面就没有必要用复数，a single cards改为a single card
第二篇
1 He has been abroad Australia six mouths改为he has been in Australia six mouths（既然这里明明写了Australia，就已经有abroad的意思了，没必要再重复了，此外Australia是一个地名，要加介词做表语）
2 he has been visited many place of Australia有误。主语he和谓语visit构成主谓关系，也就是主动关系了，没必要用been了
3 so he is very enjoying this trip.有误，表示喜欢，开心之类的意思时，是不能用现在时的，只能用一般时，改成so he enjoys this trip very much
第三篇
1 Mr. scott has opened his first garage in Silbury and lately he has opened another in Pinhust how is five miles from silbury.有误，根据阁下的意思，pinhust后面应该是一个定语从句，表示pinhust离silbury五英里，所以应该将改成which is five miles from silbury
Mr. Scoot ofen send many urgent message and requests spare part from one garage to the other有误，第三人称做主语，谓语用单数，所以send改成sends，既然用了many后面就该用复数messages，虽然message是一个抽象名词，但表示种类的时候可以用复数，所以后面的carried these message改成carried these messages
a single cardsa - single card
stay - stays
scott - Scott
Silbury - Silber
Pinhust - Pinehurst
silbury - Silber
ofen - often
Silbury - Silber
Pinhurt - Pinehurst
希望有用噢。我打了很久的唉
Postcards always spoil the writer's holiday. Last summer, the writer went to Italy to enjoy his holiday. Throughout the holiday, the writer thought about sending postcards to his friends, but he did not send a single card to anyone until the last day of his holiday. The writer made a big decision and bought thirty-seven cards and stayed the whole day in his room. But he did not write a single card.
The writer just received a letter from his brother who is an engineer. His brother has been abroad to Australia for six months but he has never visited any places of Australia. Now his brother stays in Darwin. My brother has never been abroad before, so he enjoys this trip a lot.
Mr. Scott has opened his first garage in Silbury and later another in Pinhust which is five miles away from Silbury. Mr. Scott often sends many urgent messages and requests from his one garage to the other. But he cannot get a telephone for his second garage. So he bought twelve pigeons which carry these messages and travel from one garage to the other. Yesterday, this bird covered one message from Silbury to Pinhurt and it covered the distance in three minutes.
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