TOPIC: ISSUE90 - "College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than seek programs that promise entry into the job market."
WORDS: 437 TIME: 00:38:56 DATE: 2009/3/31 17:30:19
There are many kinds of people in the world, so as the students. I strongly agree with the speaker said that student should be encouraged to learn the subjects they interested. If all students are talked to study the programs for seeking jobs, the competition might be concern in a few work areas, and the nation will lost many potential professor.
People will more active if they are learning the subjects they like. As we know the famous musician Mozart, his father had forbid him to learn anything except building and economic. However, Mozart insist his dream work, although he depart from his family. If Mozart gave up his desire, we might not listen so amazing music in the world. There are many famous people to be famous because of they choose the subject they interested in but not the subjects for work.
Furthermore, students pursuing subjects they love will provide the society perspective workers but not a single kind of people. Students who study the arts will provide us modem fashion, kinds of music, and various pictures and so on. Students who learn biology will became a doctor which can make us health. Students who learn policy might be political people and give kinds of useful suggestion to our country president. There are many advance that students encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them.
I have to admit that students learn the subjects for them to easier enter the job market have many goodness, such as the change in living condition, more and more money in their pockets and etc. But if the college students all go to learn the programs that promise entry into the job market, the students will become lazier than others. My friend Peter who entry a school which will promise they that they will get jobs when they graduate. Peter only learn what he need to learn and always play games in the rest time. He never considers to upgrade himself. Now what he only can do is the job the school plan. He even cannot speak English. What he good at is playing games. What a pity, he had been a winner in math competition many years ago, however, now he is nothing except a worker.
To sum up, College students need to be courage to pursue subjects that interest them but not learn programs that promise entry into the job market. Students should learn more when they are in college, not for jobs, but for their life. Even they cannot achieve their dreams, they might not have any pity because they acquire the skill that help them in a whole life.
People will(will be) more active if they are learning the subjects they like. As we know the famous musician Mozart, his father had forbid him to learn anything except building and economic.(as we know, the famous muxician Mozart had been forbidden by his father to learn anything except architecture and economics) However, Mozart insist his dream work(insisted on the work he had dreamed of), although he depart from his family(even at the cost of departing from his family). If Mozart gave up his desire, we might not listen so amazing music in the world(we will never have such a good chance to enjoy such amazing masterpieces in the world). There are many famous people to be famous(get to be known by the world) because of (because of the fact that)they choose the subject they interested(are interested) in but not the subjects for work.
Furthermore, students pursuing subjects they love will provide the society perspective workers but not a single kind of people. Students who study the arts will provide us modem fashion, kinds of music, and various pictures and so on. Students who learn biology will became a doctor which can make us health. Students who learn policy might be political people and give kinds of useful suggestion to our country president. There are many advance that students encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them.
I have to admit that students learn the subjects for them to easier enter the job market have many goodness, such as the change in living condition, more and more money in their pockets and etc. But if the college students all go to learn the programs that promise entry into the job market, the students will become lazier than others. My friend Peter who entry a school which will promise they that they will get jobs when they graduate. Peter only learn what he need to learn and always play games in the rest time. He never considers to upgrade himself. Now what he only can do is the job the school plan. He even cannot speak English. What he good at is playing games. What a pity, he had been a winner in math competition many years ago, however, now he is nothing except a worker.
To sum up, College students need to be courage to pursue subjects that interest them but not learn programs that promise entry into the job market. Students should learn more when they are in college, not for jobs, but for their life. Even they cannot achieve their dreams, they might not have any pity because they acquire the skill that help them in a whole life.
改了第一段的一些语法错误，后面的类似，可以放在word里让电脑给你找找。我给你改的全都维持了你的原意，其实表达还可以再多样化一些。
例子说服力稍微弱一些。
逻辑性还可继续加强。
说理更清晰些就更好。
4 行 a few？应该是 lots吧，还有 professors
5 行 will 后加be吧
就看了5行，现在不需要高手，先改进点typo，你说呢。
去寄托家园叫人改吧，不要上百度了，不如寄托好。
你写的很匆忙，38分钟，没有充分利用时间，而且说实话字数还是不够的，我到最后顺手的题目可以写出600+的字数。
是考10G的话不急慢慢练，6G的话你还是多注重点内容更有价值，思路都是每个人自己的
There are many different kinds of people in the world as there are students. I strongly agree with the speaker who said that students should be encouraged to learn the subjects they are interested in. If all students are taught to study only for seeking jobs, the competition might be concern in a few work areas, and the nation will lose many potential professors.(???)
People will be more active if they are learning the subjects they like. As we all know, the father of the famous musician Mozart,had forbidden him to learn anything except building and economic. However, Mozart insisted on pursuing his dreams, even if that ment departing with his family. If Mozart had given up then, we might not have the chance to listen to any of his amazing music. There are also many famous people who became famous because of they choose the subject they interested in and not necessarily the subjects that would get you a job.
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