我 的 志 向
毕业几年了做了很多工作，其中不管自己喜欢还是不喜欢的都在认真的去做，发现很多的工作都不如我愿，其中存在很多问题都让我没办法去做完一项工作，这大概就是别人说的杂而不专的后果吧，所以我最后总结到自己以后的发展方向。
一：向计算机方面发展。
现在这个社会对计算机的依赖是越来越强烈了，对于我们21世纪的青年人来说，不懂电脑就是文盲，而我刚好又是那种懂点但不是很精通的人，所以我想去从最基础的一面做起。首先打算是学习电脑硬件方面的东西，学习的方面来源于卖电脑或者维修、组装开始，从中就能学到电脑方面的基础知识。当感觉到自己能掌握到硬件知识比较好的时候就开始学习电脑软件方面的东西，同样是可以在卖电脑的东西学习，但是其中就要包含装电脑系统或者系统中出现的一些问题等等，这是个慢长的过程。
当一切都做完做好了大概要几年的时间，只要能把要学习的都掌握了我就打算自己开家销售、维修一起的电脑店子。
二：向销售市场发展。（除了做保险）
随着社会的进步，人消费水平和物质享受要求就会越来越高，然而社会中出现的产品就会越来越多越来越复杂，这个时候市场上就需要很多销售人员，从中就会锻炼出大量的销售人才。在销售的过程中可以锻炼一个人语言、交际、应变能力，而且做销售首先要去了解市场，这样也会让你的视眼更开拓，很多老板企业家都是从销售这个行业出来的。如果当自己在销售这个方面做到一个行业的佼佼者那就应该是到出师的时候了。
在销售这个领域中以我自己来说，我已经做过销售了，所以我可以再从基础做起，而后用自己的业绩来证明自己的能力，我相信只要自己努力做好，得到销售经理或者管理者这个位置不是什么难事情。
Good evening ladies and gentlemen
这个说法比较正式，比较套路，改成下面比较亲切：
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
Firstly, I wanna ask you two questions: how many times do you call your parents in a semester? And how many hours do you spend with your family?
修改wanna ask比较强势改成would like to 比较委婉有礼貌.
mom and dad的用法比较能唤醒大家的认同感。
给爸妈打电话，不是call，而是phone，或者make a phone call to. call这个单词虽然说有打电话的意思，但是西方人一般不这么用。因为他意思比较多，比较容易混淆。
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday,I went back home for 10 days. I surfed internet or watched tv daily in my room.
一般口语话演讲说话比较随意，英语表达surf the net 比较常用。
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet the whole house black-out suddenly.Then,my mum told me to come to the yard,and I founded that my parents and my elder sister were here.
家里停电你用blackout，老外听了会吓一跳，呵呵。用the electricity went off
suddenly 有时显得比较笨拙，all of a sudden 比较口语化，比较好一些
mum told me这里可以用call这个词了，喊的意思比较形象一些。
给你加了一句There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years.来强调停电多么难得，增加你演讲的戏剧效果。
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
we chatted with each other,full of laughter and happiness.in the dark ,even though I can’t saw them clearly at that time I enjoyed the family sweetiness. My mum said:”Do you know,we haven’t been together for a long time. Everythime I wanna talk to you ,you just faced to your loved computer.”
in the dark换做in the darkness比较好，只强调黑暗事实本身。
even though 换做 though,不一样的意思。
family sweetiness 换做 family warmth习惯用法
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what ,we haven’t been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. at that very moment. the power was on. well I didn’t come back to my loved computer but stayed with my family. And after 10 days,I had to come back school.this is my first time not willing to leave.
加了一句Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment.
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer,I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
Ladies and gentlemen, Chinese people know filial piety but lack real actions. It seems that Children had their computers and worker sun focus on his career. And elder daughter pay attention to her own family.
去掉了后面一句话
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions.
The basic filial piety doesn’t ask you to be with your parents all of your life, or ask you to give your mum a lot of money. Or make a great contribution to the family. Or to fix up a building exquisitely. What they want is just a few minutes of conversation. To touch you tohold you to know that you are good and live happily.
改动了一些
Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off your computer and tv and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls remember our inner culture.-our Chinese family culture
做了一些改动
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
你的文章感情很真挚，相信能够打动大家。
改动后的文章
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what, we haven't been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer, I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions. Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
这个说法比较正式，比较套路，改成下面比较亲切：
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
Firstly, I wanna ask you two questions: how many times do you call your parents in a semester? And how many hours do you spend with your family?
修改wanna ask比较强势改成would like to 比较委婉有礼貌.
mom and dad的用法比较能唤醒大家的认同感。
给爸妈打电话，不是call，而是phone，或者make a phone call to. call这个单词虽然说有打电话的意思，但是西方人一般不这么用。因为他意思比较多，比较容易混淆。
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday,I went back home for 10 days. I surfed internet or watched tv daily in my room.
一般口语话演讲说话比较随意，英语表达surf the net 比较常用。
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet the whole house black-out suddenly.Then,my mum told me to come to the yard,and I founded that my parents and my elder sister were here.
家里停电你用blackout，老外听了会吓一跳，呵呵。用the electricity went off
suddenly 有时显得比较笨拙，all of a sudden 比较口语化，比较好一些
mum told me这里可以用call这个词了，喊的意思比较形象一些。
给你加了一句There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years.来强调停电多么难得，增加你演讲的戏剧效果。
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
we chatted with each other,full of laughter and happiness.in the dark ,even though I can’t saw them clearly at that time I enjoyed the family sweetiness. My mum said:”Do you know,we haven’t been together for a long time. Everythime I wanna talk to you ,you just faced to your loved computer.”
in the dark换做in the darkness比较好，只强调黑暗事实本身。
even though 换做 though,不一样的意思。
family sweetiness 换做 family warmth习惯用法
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what ,we haven’t been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. at that very moment. the power was on. well I didn’t come back to my loved computer but stayed with my family. And after 10 days,I had to come back school.this is my first time not willing to leave.
加了一句Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment.
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer,I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
Ladies and gentlemen, Chinese people know filial piety but lack real actions. It seems that Children had their computers and worker sun focus on his career. And elder daughter pay attention to her own family.
去掉了后面一句话
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions.
The basic filial piety doesn’t ask you to be with your parents all of your life, or ask you to give your mum a lot of money. Or make a great contribution to the family. Or to fix up a building exquisitely. What they want is just a few minutes of conversation. To touch you tohold you to know that you are good and live happily.
改动了一些
Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off your computer and tv and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls remember our inner culture.-our Chinese family culture
做了一些改动
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
你的文章感情很真挚，相信能够打动大家。
改动后的文章
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what, we haven't been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer, I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions. Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
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Good evening ladies and gentlemen
这个说法比较正式，比较套路，改成下面比较亲切：
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
Firstly, I wanna ask you two questions: how many times do you call your parents in a semester? And how many hours do you spend with your family?
修改wanna ask比较强势改成would like to 比较委婉有礼貌.
mom and dad的用法比较能唤醒大家的认同感。
给爸妈打电话，不是call，而是phone，或者make a phone call to. call这个单词虽然说有打电话的意思，但是西方人一般不这么用。因为他意思比较多，比较容易混淆。
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday,I went back home for 10 days. I surfed internet or watched tv daily in my room.
一般口语话演讲说话比较随意，英语表达surf the net 比较常用。
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet the whole house black-out suddenly.Then,my mum told me to come to the yard,and I founded that my parents and my elder sister were here.
家里停电你用blackout，老外听了会吓一跳，呵呵。用the electricity went off
suddenly 有时显得比较笨拙，all of a sudden 比较口语化，比较好一些
mum told me这里可以用call这个词了，喊的意思比较形象一些。
给你加了一句There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years.来强调停电多么难得，增加你演讲的戏剧效果。
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
we chatted with each other,full of laughter and happiness.in the dark ,even though I can’t saw them clearly at that time I enjoyed the family sweetiness. My mum said:”Do you know,we haven’t been together for a long time. Everythime I wanna talk to you ,you just faced to your loved computer.”
in the dark换做in the darkness比较好，只强调黑暗事实本身。
even though 换做 though,不一样的意思。
family sweetiness 换做 family warmth习惯用法
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what ,we haven’t been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. at that very moment. the power was on. well I didn’t come back to my loved computer but stayed with my family. And after 10 days,I had to come back school.this is my first time not willing to leave.
加了一句Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment.
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer,I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
Ladies and gentlemen, Chinese people know filial piety but lack real actions. It seems that Children had their computers and worker sun focus on his career. And elder daughter pay attention to her own family.
去掉了后面一句话
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions.
The basic filial piety doesn’t ask you to be with your parents all of your life, or ask you to give your mum a lot of money. Or make a great contribution to the family. Or to fix up a building exquisitely. What they want is just a few minutes of conversation. To touch you tohold you to know that you are good and live happily.
改动了一些
Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off your computer and tv and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls remember our inner culture.-our Chinese family culture
做了一些改动
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
你的文章感情很真挚，相信能够打动大家。
改动后的文章
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what, we haven't been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer, I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions. Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
这个说法比较正式，比较套路，改成下面比较亲切：
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
Firstly, I wanna ask you two questions: how many times do you call your parents in a semester? And how many hours do you spend with your family?
修改wanna ask比较强势改成would like to 比较委婉有礼貌.
mom and dad的用法比较能唤醒大家的认同感。
给爸妈打电话，不是call，而是phone，或者make a phone call to. call这个单词虽然说有打电话的意思，但是西方人一般不这么用。因为他意思比较多，比较容易混淆。
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday,I went back home for 10 days. I surfed internet or watched tv daily in my room.
一般口语话演讲说话比较随意，英语表达surf the net 比较常用。
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet the whole house black-out suddenly.Then,my mum told me to come to the yard,and I founded that my parents and my elder sister were here.
家里停电你用blackout，老外听了会吓一跳，呵呵。用the electricity went off
suddenly 有时显得比较笨拙，all of a sudden 比较口语化，比较好一些
mum told me这里可以用call这个词了，喊的意思比较形象一些。
给你加了一句There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years.来强调停电多么难得，增加你演讲的戏剧效果。
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
we chatted with each other,full of laughter and happiness.in the dark ,even though I can’t saw them clearly at that time I enjoyed the family sweetiness. My mum said:”Do you know,we haven’t been together for a long time. Everythime I wanna talk to you ,you just faced to your loved computer.”
in the dark换做in the darkness比较好，只强调黑暗事实本身。
even though 换做 though,不一样的意思。
family sweetiness 换做 family warmth习惯用法
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what ,we haven’t been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. at that very moment. the power was on. well I didn’t come back to my loved computer but stayed with my family. And after 10 days,I had to come back school.this is my first time not willing to leave.
加了一句Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment.
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer,I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
Ladies and gentlemen, Chinese people know filial piety but lack real actions. It seems that Children had their computers and worker sun focus on his career. And elder daughter pay attention to her own family.
去掉了后面一句话
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions.
The basic filial piety doesn’t ask you to be with your parents all of your life, or ask you to give your mum a lot of money. Or make a great contribution to the family. Or to fix up a building exquisitely. What they want is just a few minutes of conversation. To touch you tohold you to know that you are good and live happily.
改动了一些
Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off your computer and tv and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls remember our inner culture.-our Chinese family culture
做了一些改动
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
你的文章感情很真挚，相信能够打动大家。
改动后的文章
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what, we haven't been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer, I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions. Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
第2个回答 2012-02-23
Good evening ladies and gentlemen
这个说法比较正式，比较套路，改成下面比较亲切：
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
Firstly, I wanna ask you two questions: how many times do you call your parents in a semester? And how many hours do you spend with your family?
修改wanna ask比较强势改成would like to 比较委婉有礼貌.
mom and dad的用法比较能唤醒大家的认同感。
给爸妈打电话，不是call，而是phone，或者make a phone call to. call这个单词虽然说有打电话的意思，但是西方人一般不这么用。因为他意思比较多，比较容易混淆。
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday,I went back home for 10 days. I surfed internet or watched tv daily in my room.
一般口语话演讲说话比较随意，英语表达surf the net 比较常用。
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet the whole house black-out suddenly.Then,my mum told me to come to the yard,and I founded that my parents and my elder sister were here.
家里停电你用blackout，老外听了会吓一跳，呵呵。用the electricity went off
suddenly 有时显得比较笨拙，all of a sudden 比较口语化，比较好一些
mum told me这里可以用call这个词了，喊的意思比较形象一些。
给你加了一句There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years.来强调停电多么难得，增加你演讲的戏剧效果。
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
we chatted with each other,full of laughter and happiness.in the dark ,even though I can’t saw them clearly at that time I enjoyed the family sweetiness. My mum said:”Do you know,we haven’t been together for a long time. Everythime I wanna talk to you ,you just faced to your loved computer.”
in the dark换做in the darkness比较好，只强调黑暗事实本身。
even though 换做 though,不一样的意思。
family sweetiness 换做 family warmth习惯用法
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what ,we haven’t been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. at that very moment. the power was on. well I didn’t come back to my loved computer but stayed with my family. And after 10 days,I had to come back school.this is my first time not willing to leave.
加了一句Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment.
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer,I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
Ladies and gentlemen, Chinese people know filial piety but lack real actions. It seems that Children had their computers and worker sun focus on his career. And elder daughter pay attention to her own family.
去掉了后面一句话
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions.
The basic filial piety doesn’t ask you to be with your parents all of your life, or ask you to give your mum a lot of money. Or make a great contribution to the family. Or to fix up a building exquisitely. What they want is just a few minutes of conversation. To touch you tohold you to know that you are good and live happily.
改动了一些
Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off your computer and tv and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls remember our inner culture.-our Chinese family culture
做了一些改动
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
你的文章感情很真挚，相信能够打动大家。
改动后的文章
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what, we haven't been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer, I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions. Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
这个说法比较正式，比较套路，改成下面比较亲切：
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
Firstly, I wanna ask you two questions: how many times do you call your parents in a semester? And how many hours do you spend with your family?
修改wanna ask比较强势改成would like to 比较委婉有礼貌.
mom and dad的用法比较能唤醒大家的认同感。
给爸妈打电话，不是call，而是phone，或者make a phone call to. call这个单词虽然说有打电话的意思，但是西方人一般不这么用。因为他意思比较多，比较容易混淆。
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday,I went back home for 10 days. I surfed internet or watched tv daily in my room.
一般口语话演讲说话比较随意，英语表达surf the net 比较常用。
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet the whole house black-out suddenly.Then,my mum told me to come to the yard,and I founded that my parents and my elder sister were here.
家里停电你用blackout，老外听了会吓一跳，呵呵。用the electricity went off
suddenly 有时显得比较笨拙，all of a sudden 比较口语化，比较好一些
mum told me这里可以用call这个词了，喊的意思比较形象一些。
给你加了一句There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years.来强调停电多么难得，增加你演讲的戏剧效果。
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
we chatted with each other,full of laughter and happiness.in the dark ,even though I can’t saw them clearly at that time I enjoyed the family sweetiness. My mum said:”Do you know,we haven’t been together for a long time. Everythime I wanna talk to you ,you just faced to your loved computer.”
in the dark换做in the darkness比较好，只强调黑暗事实本身。
even though 换做 though,不一样的意思。
family sweetiness 换做 family warmth习惯用法
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what ,we haven’t been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. at that very moment. the power was on. well I didn’t come back to my loved computer but stayed with my family. And after 10 days,I had to come back school.this is my first time not willing to leave.
加了一句Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment.
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer,I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
Ladies and gentlemen, Chinese people know filial piety but lack real actions. It seems that Children had their computers and worker sun focus on his career. And elder daughter pay attention to her own family.
去掉了后面一句话
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions.
The basic filial piety doesn’t ask you to be with your parents all of your life, or ask you to give your mum a lot of money. Or make a great contribution to the family. Or to fix up a building exquisitely. What they want is just a few minutes of conversation. To touch you tohold you to know that you are good and live happily.
改动了一些
Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off your computer and tv and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls remember our inner culture.-our Chinese family culture
做了一些改动
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
你的文章感情很真挚，相信能够打动大家。
改动后的文章
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what, we haven't been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer, I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions. Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
第3个回答 2012-02-23
Good evening ladies and gentlemen
这个说法比较正式，比较套路，改成下面比较亲切：
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
Firstly, I wanna ask you two questions: how many times do you call your parents in a semester? And how many hours do you spend with your family?
修改wanna ask比较强势改成would like to 比较委婉有礼貌.
mom and dad的用法比较能唤醒大家的认同感。
给爸妈打电话，不是call，而是phone，或者make a phone call to. call这个单词虽然说有打电话的意思，但是西方人一般不这么用。因为他意思比较多，比较容易混淆。
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday,I went back home for 10 days. I surfed internet or watched tv daily in my room.
一般口语话演讲说话比较随意，英语表达surf the net 比较常用。
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet the whole house black-out suddenly.Then,my mum told me to come to the yard,and I founded that my parents and my elder sister were here.
家里停电你用blackout，老外听了会吓一跳，呵呵。用the electricity went off
suddenly 有时显得比较笨拙，all of a sudden 比较口语化，比较好一些
mum told me这里可以用call这个词了，喊的意思比较形象一些。
给你加了一句There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years.来强调停电多么难得，增加你演讲的戏剧效果。
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
we chatted with each other,full of laughter and happiness.in the dark ,even though I can’t saw them clearly at that time I enjoyed the family sweetiness. My mum said:”Do you know,we haven’t been together for a long time. Everythime I wanna talk to you ,you just faced to your loved computer.”
in the dark换做in the darkness比较好，只强调黑暗事实本身。
even though 换做 though,不一样的意思。
family sweetiness 换做 family warmth习惯用法
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what ,we haven’t been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. at that very moment. the power was on. well I didn’t come back to my loved computer but stayed with my family. And after 10 days,I had to come back school.this is my first time not willing to leave.
加了一句Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment.
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer,I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
Ladies and gentlemen, Chinese people know filial piety but lack real actions. It seems that Children had their computers and worker sun focus on his career. And elder daughter pay attention to her own family.
去掉了后面一句话
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions.
The basic filial piety doesn’t ask you to be with your parents all of your life, or ask you to give your mum a lot of money. Or make a great contribution to the family. Or to fix up a building exquisitely. What they want is just a few minutes of conversation. To touch you tohold you to know that you are good and live happily.
改动了一些
Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off your computer and tv and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls remember our inner culture.-our Chinese family culture
做了一些改动
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
你的文章感情很真挚，相信能够打动大家。
改动后的文章
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what, we haven't been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer, I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions. Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
这个说法比较正式，比较套路，改成下面比较亲切：
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
Firstly, I wanna ask you two questions: how many times do you call your parents in a semester? And how many hours do you spend with your family?
修改wanna ask比较强势改成would like to 比较委婉有礼貌.
mom and dad的用法比较能唤醒大家的认同感。
给爸妈打电话，不是call，而是phone，或者make a phone call to. call这个单词虽然说有打电话的意思，但是西方人一般不这么用。因为他意思比较多，比较容易混淆。
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday,I went back home for 10 days. I surfed internet or watched tv daily in my room.
一般口语话演讲说话比较随意，英语表达surf the net 比较常用。
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet the whole house black-out suddenly.Then,my mum told me to come to the yard,and I founded that my parents and my elder sister were here.
家里停电你用blackout，老外听了会吓一跳，呵呵。用the electricity went off
suddenly 有时显得比较笨拙，all of a sudden 比较口语化，比较好一些
mum told me这里可以用call这个词了，喊的意思比较形象一些。
给你加了一句There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years.来强调停电多么难得，增加你演讲的戏剧效果。
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
we chatted with each other,full of laughter and happiness.in the dark ,even though I can’t saw them clearly at that time I enjoyed the family sweetiness. My mum said:”Do you know,we haven’t been together for a long time. Everythime I wanna talk to you ,you just faced to your loved computer.”
in the dark换做in the darkness比较好，只强调黑暗事实本身。
even though 换做 though,不一样的意思。
family sweetiness 换做 family warmth习惯用法
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what ,we haven’t been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. at that very moment. the power was on. well I didn’t come back to my loved computer but stayed with my family. And after 10 days,I had to come back school.this is my first time not willing to leave.
加了一句Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment.
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer,I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
Ladies and gentlemen, Chinese people know filial piety but lack real actions. It seems that Children had their computers and worker sun focus on his career. And elder daughter pay attention to her own family.
去掉了后面一句话
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions.
The basic filial piety doesn’t ask you to be with your parents all of your life, or ask you to give your mum a lot of money. Or make a great contribution to the family. Or to fix up a building exquisitely. What they want is just a few minutes of conversation. To touch you tohold you to know that you are good and live happily.
改动了一些
Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off your computer and tv and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls remember our inner culture.-our Chinese family culture
做了一些改动
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
你的文章感情很真挚，相信能够打动大家。
改动后的文章
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what, we haven't been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer, I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions. Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
第4个回答 2012-02-23
Good evening ladies and gentlemen
这个说法比较正式，比较套路，改成下面比较亲切：
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
Firstly, I wanna ask you two questions: how many times do you call your parents in a semester? And how many hours do you spend with your family?
修改wanna ask比较强势改成would like to 比较委婉有礼貌.
mom and dad的用法比较能唤醒大家的认同感。
给爸妈打电话，不是call，而是phone，或者make a phone call to. call这个单词虽然说有打电话的意思，但是西方人一般不这么用。因为他意思比较多，比较容易混淆。
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday,I went back home for 10 days. I surfed internet or watched tv daily in my room.
一般口语话演讲说话比较随意，英语表达surf the net 比较常用。
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet the whole house black-out suddenly.Then,my mum told me to come to the yard,and I founded that my parents and my elder sister were here.
家里停电你用blackout，老外听了会吓一跳，呵呵。用the electricity went off
suddenly 有时显得比较笨拙，all of a sudden 比较口语化，比较好一些
mum told me这里可以用call这个词了，喊的意思比较形象一些。
给你加了一句There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years.来强调停电多么难得，增加你演讲的戏剧效果。
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
we chatted with each other,full of laughter and happiness.in the dark ,even though I can’t saw them clearly at that time I enjoyed the family sweetiness. My mum said:”Do you know,we haven’t been together for a long time. Everythime I wanna talk to you ,you just faced to your loved computer.”
in the dark换做in the darkness比较好，只强调黑暗事实本身。
even though 换做 though,不一样的意思。
family sweetiness 换做 family warmth习惯用法
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what ,we haven’t been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. at that very moment. the power was on. well I didn’t come back to my loved computer but stayed with my family. And after 10 days,I had to come back school.this is my first time not willing to leave.
加了一句Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment.
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer,I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
Ladies and gentlemen, Chinese people know filial piety but lack real actions. It seems that Children had their computers and worker sun focus on his career. And elder daughter pay attention to her own family.
去掉了后面一句话
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions.
The basic filial piety doesn’t ask you to be with your parents all of your life, or ask you to give your mum a lot of money. Or make a great contribution to the family. Or to fix up a building exquisitely. What they want is just a few minutes of conversation. To touch you tohold you to know that you are good and live happily.
改动了一些
Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off your computer and tv and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls remember our inner culture.-our Chinese family culture
做了一些改动
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
你的文章感情很真挚，相信能够打动大家。
改动后的文章
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what, we haven't been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer, I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions. Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
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这个说法比较正式，比较套路，改成下面比较亲切：
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
Firstly, I wanna ask you two questions: how many times do you call your parents in a semester? And how many hours do you spend with your family?
修改wanna ask比较强势改成would like to 比较委婉有礼貌.
mom and dad的用法比较能唤醒大家的认同感。
给爸妈打电话，不是call，而是phone，或者make a phone call to. call这个单词虽然说有打电话的意思，但是西方人一般不这么用。因为他意思比较多，比较容易混淆。
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday,I went back home for 10 days. I surfed internet or watched tv daily in my room.
一般口语话演讲说话比较随意，英语表达surf the net 比较常用。
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet the whole house black-out suddenly.Then,my mum told me to come to the yard,and I founded that my parents and my elder sister were here.
家里停电你用blackout，老外听了会吓一跳，呵呵。用the electricity went off
suddenly 有时显得比较笨拙，all of a sudden 比较口语化，比较好一些
mum told me这里可以用call这个词了，喊的意思比较形象一些。
给你加了一句There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years.来强调停电多么难得，增加你演讲的戏剧效果。
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
we chatted with each other,full of laughter and happiness.in the dark ,even though I can’t saw them clearly at that time I enjoyed the family sweetiness. My mum said:”Do you know,we haven’t been together for a long time. Everythime I wanna talk to you ,you just faced to your loved computer.”
in the dark换做in the darkness比较好，只强调黑暗事实本身。
even though 换做 though,不一样的意思。
family sweetiness 换做 family warmth习惯用法
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what ,we haven’t been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. at that very moment. the power was on. well I didn’t come back to my loved computer but stayed with my family. And after 10 days,I had to come back school.this is my first time not willing to leave.
加了一句Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment.
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer,I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
Ladies and gentlemen, Chinese people know filial piety but lack real actions. It seems that Children had their computers and worker sun focus on his career. And elder daughter pay attention to her own family.
去掉了后面一句话
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions.
The basic filial piety doesn’t ask you to be with your parents all of your life, or ask you to give your mum a lot of money. Or make a great contribution to the family. Or to fix up a building exquisitely. What they want is just a few minutes of conversation. To touch you tohold you to know that you are good and live happily.
改动了一些
Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off your computer and tv and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls remember our inner culture.-our Chinese family culture
做了一些改动
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
你的文章感情很真挚，相信能够打动大家。
改动后的文章
Good evening, my fellow classmates, schoolmates, and friends
To start with, I'd like to ask you two questions: how many times do you phone your Mom and Dad during a semester? And even when you are home, how many hours do you guys spend with your family?
This summer holiday, I went back and stayed at home for 10 days. I spent all day surfing the net and watching TV in my own room. I can be sat in front of my computer for hours and it will just feel like five minutes have gone by, time does fly when I am having fun.
One night, when I was searching the internet. All of a sudden, the electricity went off. There's not a solitary instance of this having happened these years. Everybody in the house seemed calm，mum called me out to the back yard. When I got out， I saw my parents and my sister were already here.
We chatted with each other, full of laughter and fun. In the darkness, though we were unable to clearly see each other, I enjoyed the family warmth. My mum said:”You know what, we haven't been together for a long time. Even you are home, everythime I wanna talk to you ,you always sat focused in front of your loved computer.”
I was shocked and kept silent. Guilt was written all over my face at that very moment. when the electricity was on. well, I didn't come back to my loved computer, I kept staying with my family. We chatted unitil late at night. After 10 days, I had to come back school. This is my first time not willing to leave.
My friends，Chinese people do know a lot about filial piety but, as I know, lack of actions. Filial piety doesn't call for you to be with your parents all the time, require you to give your mum a lot of money, or make a great contribution to the family. What they need is just a few minutes of talk. Touching you, holding you, simply knowing that you are good and live happily.
Maybe one day, we should turn off our computers, TV and cancel all of your unnecessary parties to come back home and see your parents. And if you are in the distant city, please pick up your phone and call your family.No matter how the society develops,pls bear our culture in mind--our Chinese family culture.
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