Last week,the weather was beautiful,Tom went to the park with his family.They were very happy,and took many photos.Later on Tom saw a blind women.Tom came up to him,then helped him with stick.At last,they took a photo together.If everyone has a loving heart,the world will become better and better.
首先，形容weather不用beautiful.你可以形容一下天气It is a really nice day full of sunshine.作文中多用复合句型提升档次。woman是单数，不用复数形式。helped her.女士的宾格形式是her.with a stick,要有介词。祝你学习进步！望采纳
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