才写的，我们英语作文是算考试成绩的，所以大家帮忙看看有没有错误~~~有错的麻烦在不改变原句意思的情况下帮我修改下~谢谢了~速度哦~~~在线等！好的还给追加！
Dear Ben
Thank you very much for your letter.I hope I can offer you some useful suggestions.
You said you feel stressed with schoolwork and you have a lot of homework to do so you hardly have any spare time for your hobbies.It will be a good choise to make a list of all the homework you have to do.Then work out how much time you need to complete it all.This will give you an idea of how much free time you have so that you can have some time do relax.
It seems that you often quarrel with you parents.You need to chat with them and get help from them.The best way is to let your parents see you progress.
You said you are afraid of being laughed at when you don't do well in study.Please pay no attention to those students who laugh at you and be proud of your schoolwork.
I hope my advice is worth taking.
Best wishes.
Your friend
2. 前面说schoolwork，后面又是homework，感觉相当生硬，你可以换种说法 the workload in school，显得更活泼一点
3. said可以换成groused或者complained，会好些，哪怕用mentioned也可以哇。
4. choise 应该是手误啦，但是即使这样，用choice也不太合适，因为这里并没有提到还有什么其他可以选择的做法，你可以用idea
5. Then...后面的句子不应该是单独成句，它应该和上文成为并列句。
6. 如果上文用了idea，这里可以避免重复，说 This will let you know.....，因为既然都已经算出了需要多少时间完成工作，自然就知道自己的空闲时间有多少啦！
7. so that 后面的 some time, 和 how much free time，显得啰嗦，比较wordy
8. quarrel用这里不太合适，改成 argue
9. get 改成 accept 比较好。这里是在建议该怎么做，get是自己主动去获取，考虑到这里的情景，是建议和父母谈心，那父母应该是会有些帮助的提供，作为他本身，应该是“主观上愿意去接受”比“自己主动去获取”更好点，更符合实际情况。
10. who laugh at 应该是可能情况，最好前面加个may
11. schoolwork 不如 performance 好
12. worth taking？？？ 知道你想表达什么，但是这么说话太别扭啦，得改改。
13. Your friend 最好改成 Yours sincerely
总得来说，没有什么太大的语法错误，就是在遣词用字方面，要注意些细微差别，我帮你润饰修改了一下，希望你喜欢！
Dear Ben
Thank you very much for your letter. I hope I can give you some useful suggestions.
You complained you have felt stressed with the workload in school and you have had a lot of homework to do so you have hardly had any spare time for your hobbies. It will be a good idea to make a list of all the homework you are required to do and work out how much time you need to complete them all. This will let you know how much free time left for you for relaxation.
It seems that you often argue with you parents. You'd better chat with them and accept their help. The best way is to let your parents see how you gradually progress.
You also mentioned that you were afraid of being laughed at when you didn't do well in study. Please ignore those students who may laugh at you and be proud of yourself.
I hope my advice can be helpful to you and get you out of the situation.
Best wishes
Yours sincerely
1. 你的从句的时态跟你主句的时态是不一致的。
2. 不是 choise，而是 choice
3. 我觉得那句 how much time you need to complete it all 改成：how long you need to complete them all 比较好.
4. so that you can have some time do relax 应该是 to relax.
5. 落款应该是 yours,
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