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It is a fine day. Having prepared for a picnic,we drove into the country and found a quiet spot . The moment we descended from our car,we unpacked our hampers and sat around.
There were a few wasps near us . Then a great many wasps gathered, after which we made our efforts to drive them away.Suddenly,I saw a wasp nest in a tree nearby, we seized our things and returned to our car as soon as we could.Pursued by wasps,we drove away.总体不错，用了不少难句，这个是加分的，但是叙述中then,after等用的太多，完全就是一种记叙，这样不太好。连词尽量少出现。

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