I am an optimistic, honest, diligent and hardy individual with careful attitude and easy-going personality. I am confident but not proud. During my college, I served as class cadre and vice president of Student Union. I have good self-study ability and willing to accept new things and tools. I possess excellent organizing and coordinating ability, as well as effective communication skills, teamwork spirit and outstanding independent working ability. I’m familiar with office software and CAD. I have excellent English competence in speaking, listening and writing. Ready for business trips.
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I am an optimistic, honest, diligent and hardy 【individual改为person】 with careful attitude and easy-going personality. I am confident but not 【proud改为arrogant】. During my college, I served as class cadre and vice president of Student Union. I 【have good self-study ability改为am good at self-studying】 and 【willing to accept new things and tools改为desirous to learn new things and skills】. 【I possess excellent organizing and coordinating ability, as well as effective communication skills, teamwork spirit and outstanding independent working ability改为With strong teamwork consciousness and independent working ability, I am competent in coordinating and communicating with others as well as organizing tasks】. I’m familiar with office software[s] and CAD. I am proficient in English and always ready for business trips.
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第1个回答 2013-04-20
太多I am这种简单句了来自：求助得到的回答
第1个回答 2013-04-20
……and I am willing to accept……追问
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第2个回答 2013-04-19
错误很多。。中式英语明显追问
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追答说实话，我不是不想帮你， 我能看出错误，但具体怎么改我真心帮不了你，比较难，我水平层次还没到。。另谋高就吧。
